Jasmine Hart

Brigid As it turned out, I didn't get to speak with my sister until night had fallen. Oisin had taken first watch, and so the pair of us were readying ...

Ok...I'll have to go google the victorian era...ooooh. There's some really interesting stuff on wikipedia. It says that women couldn't be charged for stealing if they were acting on their ...

Keturah I barelled down the road as quickly as I could, still angry at the fact that my meal had been left unfinished on the counter, and at everyone who ...

I agree about the adjectives, and I'd use punctuation. I loved the second stanza, but I think that you could feel this more, hence helping your readers to feel it. ...

I like it, but I'm not sure about the ends of the verses. I don't think they properly conveyed the worry and heartache and grief, and all the other things ...

Lol. This was great, very funny. I think the second line needs another syllabyl. Maybe choose an adjective with two syllabyls, and say "(adjective) monsters lurk under my bed." I ...

Lol. Lovely. I think I'd change "shining" to "blazing" as it sounds more menacing. I'd omit the comma after "feather", as I don't think that you need it. I love ...

How did I not see this until now? Ok, this made my eyes well up! No joke! That never happens! I really love this. (Though, what's new? I love everything ...

I really enjoyed this piece, the atmosphere was great and your language (unsurprisingly) is beautiful, especially in the first paragraph. The first two paragraphs in particular were brilliant. Now...a

This was an interesting piece, and, as always, your description was great. I loved the dialogue, it really brought the piece to life. Paragraphs four and five were great. I'm ...

Wow, this was amazing. Beautifully, beautifully written. Though, in the fifth last line, did you mean to say "And you?" I love it. Your language was beautiful, and this was ...

This was nice. Your descriptions are very good, especially in the first and second stanzas. I didn't like "belated, little genius." as it sounded odd, and it didn't make much ...

Firstly, I'd like to see some more punctuation here. Was the contradiction in the first verse intentional? If not, I'd rework either line two or line three.Preferably line two, as ...

I'd scrap the rhyme, as I think that it's restraining you. E.g, phrases such as "your romance of the night" sound a little awkward. If you like it and want ...

Absolutely nothing, except some random posts for storybooks! I keep saying I can't write until I've typed up my novel, and then I keep...not typing it! I give myself another ...